Thursday, March 26, 2009
My name is Abdullah I’m 21 years old. I joined the military when I was 19 old. I decided to become a cadet when I was a child because my father is an officer in the army since 1989. I like to be like my father. I like his personality and characteristic and that should the military taught to his cadets. I like to be a cadet because I like to be responsible for the soldiers and take care of them. A good cadet should be perfect in fitness and well personality. I want to be cadet because I want to defended my country in war time if it is happen and I want to help in the area of technological weapons and improve these weapons and discover new way for less harmful way to teach the new military soldiers the exercises.
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ReplyDeleteI think it's wonderful that you want to be like your father!
1. You need a period after "My name is Abdullah"
2. You need a comma after "it is happen" Actually, the last 4 lines are one long run-on sentence and should be divided into 2 or more sentences.